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3941379-614855Name: ___________________English class: ______Teacher: __________________020000Name: ___________________English class: ______Teacher: __________________Year 7 Revision BookletWriting exam: 45 minutesYou will be given a picture and asked to either:Write a description of the picture ORWrite a storyWhat am I aiming to show?You will be given a mark out of 24 for content and organisation and a mark out of 16 for technical accuracy. This will be added together to give you a total mark out of 40.Content and organisation (24 marks)Communication is convincing and compelling throughoutTone, style and register matched to purpose, form and audienceExtensive and ambitious vocabularyRange of techniques – similes, metaphors, personification, alliteration, pathetic fallacy, etcIdeas are organised into paragraphsParagraphs are fluently linked with a range of connectives both within and between paragraphsTechnical accuracy (16 marks)Accurate use of full stops, capital letters and commas throughoutFull range of punctuation used accurately - …():;!? -,.Full range of sentence lengths and structuresUses Standard English (no slang)Accurate spelling-31422269021Vocabulary bankSmell words – acidic, aromatic, spicy, musty, fetid, rancid, sweet, putrid, pine, acrid, mint, pungent, floral, noxious, repulsive, foulSound words – thunder, crackle, scream, rustle, plop, tinkle, wheeze, crunch, jungle, throb, howl, caterwaul, snarl, bark, bang, raspTaste words – ripe, velvety, sharp, fiery, silky, syrupy, tangy, gritty, fizzy, sour, peppery, bitter, brackish, zesty, foulTouch words – blunt, jagged, clammy, viscous (sticky), leathery, coarse, smooth, greasy, fleecy, treacly, damp, feathery, rubbery, abrasive, slippery, glueySight words – sleek, crumbling, ancient, lustrous, radiant, lacklustre, dismal, dazzling, drab, luminous, picturesque, leaden, panoramic, resplendent, ominouswhite –snowy, silvery, bleachedcold – frosty, bitter, wintry, icyexcited – eager, ecstatic, thrilled, animated, energisedjoyous – blissful, jubilant, exuberant, delighted, merryscreams – shrieks, yells, cries, yelps, squeals, squawks00Vocabulary bankSmell words – acidic, aromatic, spicy, musty, fetid, rancid, sweet, putrid, pine, acrid, mint, pungent, floral, noxious, repulsive, foulSound words – thunder, crackle, scream, rustle, plop, tinkle, wheeze, crunch, jungle, throb, howl, caterwaul, snarl, bark, bang, raspTaste words – ripe, velvety, sharp, fiery, silky, syrupy, tangy, gritty, fizzy, sour, peppery, bitter, brackish, zesty, foulTouch words – blunt, jagged, clammy, viscous (sticky), leathery, coarse, smooth, greasy, fleecy, treacly, damp, feathery, rubbery, abrasive, slippery, glueySight words – sleek, crumbling, ancient, lustrous, radiant, lacklustre, dismal, dazzling, drab, luminous, picturesque, leaden, panoramic, resplendent, ominouswhite –snowy, silvery, bleachedcold – frosty, bitter, wintry, icyexcited – eager, ecstatic, thrilled, animated, energisedjoyous – blissful, jubilant, exuberant, delighted, merryscreams – shrieks, yells, cries, yelps, squeals, squawksExtensive and ambitious vocabularyUsing more ambitious vocabularySynonym challengeA synonym is a word that means the same as another wordComplete the table by adding as many synonyms as you can think of. The first column has been done for you.happysadhotcoldangrycalmblissfulcheerycontentdelightedecstaticeuphoricexultantgleefuljovialjoyfuljubilantrapturousthrilledSuperb similesA simile is _________________________________________________________Complete these similes:The moon glowed like ________________________________________________Raindrops dripped down the window pane like ______________________________Smoke floated on the air like __________________________________________The air smells as fresh as ____________________________________________The rose petals are as delicate as ______________________________________The surface of the water is as smooth as _________________________________The icicles pointed downwards like ______________________________________Dewdrops glistened on the flowers like ___________________________________The fog covered the city like __________________________________________The clouds are as fluffy as ___________________________________________The girl sings as sweetly as ___________________________________________The traffic moved as slowly as _________________________________________The crows cackled like _______________________________________________The children scuttled across the beach like _______________________________The road wove its way up the mountain like ________________________________The sea sand lay across the path like ____________________________________The water streamed down like _________________________________________Snow drifted to the earth like _________________________________________Clumps of snow stuck to the branches like ________________________________Her angry words spewed out like________________________________________The rain tapped on the roof as steadily as _________________________________The wind rushed through the house like ___________________________________Wildflowers dotted the landscape like ____________________________________The child ate like ____________________________________________________His stomach rumbled like ______________________________________________The soft breeze on her face was as gentle as _______________________________Snow topped the mountain like __________________________________________-180975165735spilled sugarsharp needlesChristmas decorationsa beating drumtiny crabsa fairy’s kissespolished diamondswhipped creama mirrorgiant’s tearsa famished wolfwispy feathersa grey blanketan express traina bridal veila lustrous pearla larkfine silkdemented witchesdistant thundernewly washed linen a golden halo020000spilled sugarsharp needlesChristmas decorationsa beating drumtiny crabsa fairy’s kissespolished diamondswhipped creama mirrorgiant’s tearsa famished wolfwispy feathersa grey blanketan express traina bridal veila lustrous pearla larkfine silkdemented witchesdistant thundernewly washed linen a golden haloPerfect personificationPersonification is when human qualities are given to things that are not human. It is a very effective descriptive writing technique.Underline the example of personification in each sentence.3487479271145001. The wind sang her mournful song through the falling leaves.2. The strawberries seemed to sing, "Eat me first!" 3867593189112003. The rain kissed my cheeks as it fell.4. The daffodils nodded their yellow heads at the walkers.5. The water beckoned invitingly to the hot swimmers.6. The snow whispered as it fell to the ground during the early morning hours.408238521590007. The china danced on the shelves during the earthquake.-199390511175Personification examples to use/adapt:The sun smiled proudly like a queen surveying her kingdom.The wind sang softly as it waltzed through the trees.The first rays of morning tiptoed through the glistening white meadow.The tree branches moaned quietly.The blizzard swallowed the town.00Personification examples to use/adapt:The sun smiled proudly like a queen surveying her kingdom.The wind sang softly as it waltzed through the trees.The first rays of morning tiptoed through the glistening white meadow.The tree branches moaned quietly.The blizzard swallowed the town.8. The car engine coughed and sputtered when it started during the blizzard.Showing not Telling: Allow your reader to infer meaning, rather than simply telling them, by zooming in and describing the smallest of details. 3057525114300234315040195501905396557579375004752975129540Think carefully about the route through your description. Whilst you might not be able to see exactly what individuals are doing, you can use your imagination and make this up – within reason! Remember to show and not tell.Your turn: write a description of the ice rink at Christmas time. Practice assessmentYour school or college is asking students to contribute some creative writing for its website.026352500Write a description suggested by this picture:OR Write a story which begins: I guessed that something was wrong as soon as I …(24 marks for content and organisation16 marks for technical accuracy)-16065582550Don’t forget to vary sentence length and structure:Different sentence starters:With an adverb (ly word) – surreptitiously, suddenly, cautiously, proudlyWith a connective:Even though…,Despite…,Whilst…,As…,With a simileThe moon smiled proudly, like a queen surveying her kingdom.Like a queen surveying her kingdom, the moon smiled proudly.00Don’t forget to vary sentence length and structure:Different sentence starters:With an adverb (ly word) – surreptitiously, suddenly, cautiously, proudlyWith a connective:Even though…,Despite…,Whilst…,As…,With a simileThe moon smiled proudly, like a queen surveying her kingdom.Like a queen surveying her kingdom, the moon smiled proudly.[40 marks]Example of excellent descriptive writingNow look at this example. Label all the features that make it an effective description.1400175172720effective adverb00effective adverb3486150172720effective simile00effective simile20002548895alliteration00alliteration1266825514340013525501181100042862551435Clouds crawl majestically across a black velvet sky studded with tiny diamond-like stars. Like a delighted queen surveying her magical kingdom, the pearly moon smiles proudly. Anticipation simmers. The air is ripe with excitement. Despite the icy chill that pierces the night like a knife, crowds have gathered on the old market square. Welcome to Wonderland!The first stall offers a range of tasty treats: warm mince pies that melt in the mouth; striped candy canes in a myriad of colours; hot turkey sandwiches that smell divine; gingerbread reindeer with sparkling antlers; and luscious hot drinks like sweet, syrupy nectar. The temptation proves too much.“I want that one!” a child yelps excitedly as he points to a gigantic chocolate snowman.“Just a minute Ben,“ his Dad replies.But Ben’s excitement is insuppressible. His hand flies towards the snowman, snatching frantically at the plastic casing. He grabs it and tugs violently, sending scores of chocolate treats cascading to the ground. Disaster! Ben’s Dad is furious. The stall-holder is livid. Ben’s in trouble…serious trouble.“How could you be so stupid?” his Dad roars. Ben is silent and shame-faced; words have escaped him.Far from the commotion and chaos of the food stall, an elderly couple stroll towards the candle stall. The smell is heavenly: cinnamon, vanilla, spiced orange, heather and saffron. Spoilt for choice, they gaze in wonder at the tiny flames that dance and flicker. Their eyes feast on the sumptuous selection before they eventually make a choice. Hand in hand, they wander on, clutching their precious purchase.Meanwhile, at the Christmas jumper stall, an argument is brewing. One jumper, two sisters…who will win? They scowl at each other menacingly.“Sorry girls, that’s the last one I’m afraid.” The stall-holder tries to tempt the girls with an alternative design. It’s futile. Their minds are made up.“Perhaps you could share it?” the elderly stall-holder suggests.“Not a chance,” replies their Mum.The stall-holder shrugs sympathetically whilst the innocent jumper sits patiently on its hanger. This battle has only just begun.On the other side of the market a group of amateur singers are warming up for their much-anticipated performance. Clutching their music, they begin to sing their joyful, jubilant carols. Ribbons of sweet music spiral through the night sky.The royal moon is elated and content. Her smile widens. ‘Merry Christmas’ she whispers to herself. ‘Merry Christmas everyone.’ Practice assessmentYour school or college is asking students to contribute some creative writing for its website.023368000Write a description suggested by this picture:ORWrite a story which begins: The last thing I wanted to do that day was…(24 marks for content and organisation16 marks for technical accuracy)[40 marks]Practice assessments-15476028566300Write a description suggested by this picture:OR Write a story which begins: I always knew…Write a description suggested by this picture:-1576557094600OR Write a story which begins: As the mist cleared, I saw…READING EXAM 1 hour:REMEMBER it is incredibly important to read the extract before tackling any of the questions. Here is some advice for your reading time (15 minutes).Top tips:Before your read the extract, read all of the questions. As you read the extract, make a note next to each section with a brief note stating what is happening.Highlight or underline any parts of the text which you think may be useful when answering any of the questions. Now, have a go at reading the questions and the extract. QUESTION 1How many marks is this question worth?___________________________________________________________How long should you spend on it?What advice has your teacher given you when answering this question?What skills is this question testing?A01: Identifying explicit information and ideas from a text.List four things about…Top tips:Underline the focus of the question –make sure all of your points are linked to this.Put a bracket around the lines in the Source that you need to find your answers from.Put one point in each bullet point –paraphrase or quote.Write in short, simple sentences Now, have a go at answering Q1!QUESTION 2How many marks is this question worth?___________________________________________________________How long should you spend on it?___________________________________________________________What skills is this question testing?AO2: Explaining and analysing how the writer has used language.How does the writer use language to…What advice has your teacher given you when answering this question?Top tips:Underline the focus of the question - make sure your points are linked to this.Make sure you only choose quotes from the lines they have given you (not the whole extract).Aim to write about 3 bits of effective language.Try to use short quotes (a few words/one word).Just state ‘word’ or ‘phrase’ if you do not know the correct terminology… don’t guess!Most of the marks are for your analysis of the words and phrases used –make sure you focus on why the writer had used certain words or phrases, the effects created and the impact on the reader.Useful sentence starters:The word or phrase “_______” shows that….It also suggests that….The writer uses… to…The word ‘_______’ has connotations of…For example “__________”.It also suggests/infers/implies that…The writer is trying to…Now, try to answer Q2!QUESTION 3How many marks is this question worth?___________________________________________________________How long should you spend on it?___________________________________________________________What skills is this question testing?A04: Evaluating the text critically, considering the methods used by the writer (language, structure).A student having read this section of the text said “….” To what extent do you agree?What advice has your teacher given you when answering this question?Top tips:Underline the keywords in the statement- make sure your ideas are linked to these.Make sure you only choose quotes from the lines they have given you (not the whole extract).Try to use short quotes (a few words/one word).Refer to the methods used by the writer (language, structure). Explain why certain words or phrases have been used and the impact they have.Useful sentence starters:I agree that the writer… because…One way the writer… is through…For example…The text states…This can be seen where…This shows/suggests/implies…This creates the impression that…The effect on the reader is…The writer intends to…Now have a go at Question 3!Practice Reading Exam Paper:left6214746005286375370522512 marks12 markslefttop002476491847853003QUESTION 1 ANSWERS:You may have included any four of the following: he was a small man he had wild eyes he was bare-chested his skin was covered in scars (and bruises) he had faded tattoos on his body he had a canvas sack (on a long stick) his hair was black he had pointed gold teeth (at the front of his mouth) he wore tiny golden earrings there were deep creases in his cheeks.MODEL ANSWER FOR QUESTION 2:The reader is told that he ‘groaned’ to lift the wheel. The verb ‘groaned’ suggests how much of an effort it is to lift the wheel and implies he is moaning through the pain. This is reinforced with the sentence, ‘There were tears of strain in his eyes’ as if he was literally crying with the effort needed. The rhetorical question McNulty asks of himself, ‘Could he?’ pulls the crowd into his effort and builds up a sense of drama. It is not certain whether he will be strong enough or not and this adds to the tension of the moment. When the crowd ‘gasped’, the writer’s use of onomatopoeia recreates the sound that the crowd made. It makes it seem like a great achievement because the crowd all reacted in the same way.Can you spot the following features which make this a strong answer?Colour codeCarefully selected quotations which help to answer the question.Zooming in on key words.Explanations of the connotations and associations we have with this word.Consideration of why this word has been used.Explanation of techniques used by the writer.MODEL ANSWER FOR QUESTION 3:I understand what the student means here and agree with the statement. The writer effectively shows how Bobby is fearful of McNulty when Bobby tells us ‘he cupped my shoulder and drew me to him’. One method that the writer uses to emphasise the way that Bobby feels is through the verb ‘drew’. This implies that McNulty entices Bobby to help, although Bobby seems unsure about this. It suggests McNulty has power and control. Later, the writer successfully conveys Bobby’s fear when he notices McNulty’s eyes are ‘so deep and dark’. These adjectives could imply that Bobby thinks that McNulty has a hidden and evil character; he is curious and wants to find out more about him. Another method that the writer clearly uses to create fear of McNulty is when he describes him as a reptile through references to ‘his skin glistened’ and the way he ‘crouched’ down. It’s like he is about to pounce. What has this student done well? __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ................
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