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GCSE FRENCH

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Marked Papers Paper 4: Writing

Understand how to apply the mark scheme for the writing paper

EXAMPLE RESPONSES

Version 1.0 01 September 2017

This resource comprises example answers with senior examiner commentaries and mark schemes for GCSE French (8658) Paper 4 Writing. Examples of student work at both Foundation and Higher Tier are contained in this resource. Also included is a commentary for each piece of work, with the marks awarded. The resource aims to show how the mark scheme is applied. Whilst every attempt has been made to show a range of student responses, they are not intended to be viewed as `model' answers and the marking has not been subject to the usual standardisation process.

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Foundation Tier

Question one

0 1 Vous envoyez une photo WhatsApp ? votre ami(e) fran?ais(e).

Qu'est-ce qu'il y a sur la photo? Ecrivez quatre phrases en fran?ais. Extract from mark scheme Question 01 For this question, students are required to write four sentences. Each sentence is marked according to the following criteria. The maximum mark is 8. [8 marks] Mark Communication

2 The relevant message is clearly communicated. 1 The message is relevant but has some ambiguity and causes a delay in

communication. 0 The message is irrelevant or cannot be understood.

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Foundation student one

Response 01.1 Je mange de salade 01.2 Je bu du l'eau minerale 01.3 Je suis parle avec mes copains 01.4 Il y a professeur

Commentary Question part Comments

01.1

2 marks. The message is clearly communicated with no ambiguity.

01.2

2 marks. The message is clearly communicated with no

ambiguity. N.B. General principle ? it is acceptable for students to

describe what is on the photo in the past tense.

01.3

2 marks. The message is clearly communicated with no ambiguity.

01.4

1 mark. There is some ambiguity here. Is it `the/a/my teacher?'

Total: 7 marks

Foundation student two

Response 01.1 Le gar?ons manger une salade 01.2 Le fille manger un hamburger 01.3 Le gar?on travaille dans un restaurant 01.4 Le waiter ?tait sympa

Commentary Question part Comments

01.1

1 mark. There is a delay in communication.

Note: General principle ? use of infinitive would delay communication.

01.2

1 mark. There is a delay in communication.

01.3

1 mark. There is some ambiguity here. Does `gar?on' refer to a

waiter/the boy eating salad/another boy who might be a waiter?

01.4

0 marks. The message cannot be understood.

Total: 3 marks

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Question two

0 2 Vous ?tes en vacances et vous ?crivez ? votre ami(e) fran?ais(e). Mentionnez: ? o? vous ?tes ? la m?t?o ? l'h?tel ? vos activit?s de vacances. Ecrivez environ 40 mots en fran?ais. [16 marks]

Extract from mark scheme Question 02

For this question there are four compulsory bullet points, which are assessed for Content (10 marks) and Quality of language (6 marks), as specified in the criteria below. The maximum mark is 16. The student is expected to produce approximately 40 words over the whole question. The number of words is approximate and you must mark all work produced by the student.

[16 marks]

Content

Level Marks Response

5 9-10 A full coverage of the required information. Communication is clear.

4

7-8 A good coverage of the required information. Communication is

mostly clear but perhaps with occasional lapses.

3

5-6 A reasonable coverage of the required information. Communication

is generally clear but there are likely to be lapses.

2

3-4 A partial coverage of the required information. Communication is

sometimes clear but there are instances where messages are not

conveyed.

1

1-2 A minimal coverage of the required information. Communication is

often not clear and there may be frequent instances where

messages are not conveyed.

0

0 The content does not meet the standard required for Level 1 at this

tier.

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Quality of language

Level Marks Response

3

5-6 Uses a variety of appropriate vocabulary and grammatical

structures. Generally accurate.

2

3-4 Vocabulary and grammatical structures generally appropriate to the

task, with some attempt at variety. More accurate than inaccurate.

1

1-2 Vocabulary and structures used may be limited, repetitive or

inappropriate. There may be frequent errors.

0

0 The language produced does not meet the standard required for

Level 1 at this tier.

Notes

A mark of zero for Content automatically results in a mark of zero for Quality of language, but apart from that, the Content mark does not limit the mark for Quality of language.

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Foundation student one

Response Je suis dans le Grece et le temps est super car il y a soleil et il y a chaud. Je suis dans le Grece dans un h?tel. Il y a une bon restaurant et un piscine et une bar chiq. Dans ma chambre il y a un grand television, un balcone et une grand lit. Je suis dans le Grece avec mes amis et chaque jour nous avons jouer au foot ensuite nous avons visiter au restaurant et je mange un pizza.

Commentary Content There is a full coverage of the required information: where they are, the weather, the hotel and the activities. Communication is totally clear for two of these. There are some areas in bullets 2 and 4 where there is some delay: `il y a chaud' and the last sentence does not communicate clearly. The work fits the criteria for award of marks in the top band, but the lower mark of 9 is appropriate. Quality of language The work is more accurate than inaccurate. There is some attempt at variety, although the structures in the last sentence are not totally accurate. This, together with the number of minor errors would suggest a mark of 3 rather than 4. Total: 9+3=12

Foundation student two

Response Je suis alle en Italie au bor de la mer avec mes aimes pour deux mois et reste dans une h?tel. En vacances le temps en Italie qu'en beau en Angleterre. Pendant les vacances, j'ai joue au foot avec mes aimes et fair du vello. L'hotel est grand et modern. Commentary Content The information relating to where they are, the hotel and activities is covered. The message relating to the weather does not communicate and there is some delay with language such as: `mes aimes, fair du vello'. The piece is borderline, but it is true to say that communication is mostly clear. A mark of 7 is awarded. Quality of language There is some attempt at variety but there are the minor errors; `je suis alle, bor, une h?tel, j'ai joue, modern'. A mark of 3 seems appropriate as one would be tempted more by the level below than the level above. Total: 7+3=10

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Question three

0 3 Translate the following sentences into French. My father is tall.

At school I like maths and science.

I listen to music in the evening.

In my town there is a cinema and a museum.

I played football in the park with my friends.

[10 marks]

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