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Task 1 General

You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems.

Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter:

explain your situation

describe your problems

tell him/her when you think you can move in

Dear Mr. Black,

I am writing this letter with regards to the apartment occupation scheduled for the next month. due to I am not going to be able to move in the date agreed.

I am very interested on taking for rent the apartment. However, I have some personal issues to solve first that does not allow me to take the apartment in the exact date we talked.

First of all, one of the main issues is that my college application is not yet finished and is probably that I am not going to be accepted until the second semester of this year. Consequently, if this happens I will stay for the moment in my home country till I have an answer in this matter. In addition, I am having trouble with my study visa. It seems that the passport with the visą got lost in mail, so I have to wait to solve this. Therefore, according to the immigration office of my country the process of having a new passport and the student' visa is going to take at least 2 months.

I would be thankful If there is the option for me to move the date of taking the apartment 6 months later from the initial date planned.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

XXXXXXXXXXX

1 In-depth task feedback

1 TASK ACHIEVEMENT

YOU HAVE AN INTRODUCTION yes

IT HAS A CLEAR PURPOSE partially, due to your language choices it’s hard to understand what you are trying to say

YOU COVER ALL BULLET POINTS IN THE LETTER yes

YOU DEVELOP ALL BULLET POINTS you could develop the last bullet point more and not repeat your introduction twice

YOU CLOSE YOUR LETTER yes

YOU USE A PROPER CLOSING FOR THE LETTER yes

YOU ANSWER THE QUESTION yes, but you could expand point 3 more

YOU USE THE RIGHT TONE IN YOUR LETTER yes, but some of the language you use could be better

YOU DON’T GO OFF TOPIC yes, but you repeat some things

YOU HAVE AT LEAST 150 WORDS yes

2 COHERENCE & COHESION

YOU ORGANISE YOUR INFORMATION CLEARLY, the organisation is clear, the language isn’t always

YOU HAVE CLEARLY MARKED PARAGRAPHS no, having an arrow to indicate a paragraph is not how you write, you need to leave an empty line to show different paragraphs

YOUR PARAGRAPHS ARE LOGICALLY STRUCTURED yes

YOU USE COHESIVE DEVICES yes, but some of the connectors are not the right ones to use or you use them wrongly

YOU USE REFERENCING AND SUBSTITUTION, yes but you should reference and subsituate a lot more

YOU DON’T HAVE TOO LONG SENTENCES WITH TOO MANY CLAUSES yes

YOU DON’T HAVE TOO SHORT SENTENCES no, you could connect certain sentences and use a lot more clauses

YOU DON’T HAVE FRAGMENTED SENTENCE THAT DO NOT MAKE SENSE yes

YOUR WORD ORDER IN SENTENCES IS GOOD yes, apart from some small issues

2 LEXICAL RESOURCES

YOU USE A WIDE RANGE OF VOCABULARY FOR THE TASK no, you can use a lot more complex/formal language as well as synonyms for some of the language you use

YOU USE YOUR VOCABULARY FLUENTLY AND FLEXIBLY no, you have difficulty expressing yourself in a fluent and flexible way

YOU DON’T MAKE NOTICEABLE ERRORS IN SPELLING yes

YOU DON’T MAKE NOTICEABLE ERRORS IN WORD FORMATION yes

YOU DON’T MAKE NOTICEABLE ERRORS IN COLLOCATIONS no, you have some issues with collocating certain words

YOU DON’T MAKE NOTICEABLE ERRORS IN WORD CHOICE no, you have issues with some of the words you chose and some of them could be more formal

YOUR ERRORS DON’T CAUSE DIFFICULTY TO UNDERSTAND YOU partially, there are some difficulties here and there that make it harder to understand what you are trying to say.

3 GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY

YOU USE COMPLEX SENTENCES ACCURATELY no, you use many basic sentence and could make your sentences more complex

YOU USE A WIDE RANGE OF GRAMMATICAL STRUCTURES FOR THE TASK no, you use the basic structures needed for the task

YOU DON’T MAKE NOTICEABLE ERRORS IN GRAMMAR partially, there are some errors, but they do not make it harder to understand

YOU DON’T MAKE NOTICEABLE ERRORS IN PUNCTUATION yes

YOUR ERRORS DON’T CAUSE DIFFICULTY TO UNDERSTAND YOU yes

4

5 General feedback on target score

GOAL 6.5 :

1 TASK ACHIEVEMENT: on target

You have a good understanding of what needs to be done. You answer the question but some of the point could be more expanded (point 3). You generally use the correct tone, but your language issues impede you from using more complex formal structures

2 COHESION AND COHERENCE: needs some more work

You have the correct structure and it's logically organized. You just need more work on:

Clearly marked paragraph

Avoid repeating things

Connectors

Referencing and Substitution

Language use wirth makes it hard to understand

3 LEXICAL RESOURCES: needs a lot more work

You have the basic vocabulary for the task, but you should expand it a lot more. This will help you to be more flexible and chose better words. You need to work on:

Expanding your lexical range

Word choices

Synonyms

GRAMMATICAL ACCURACY: need a lot more work

You have the basic grammar to deal with the task but you could expand a lot more. You need to work on:

Making more complex sentences

Articles

Conditionals

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