To write squeaky-clean sentences, raise the verb-word ratio

John’s love for her. 1 verb/ 16 words . The dependence of John’s love for her upon her inheritance . Of money is known to Mary. 1 verb/15 words * * * * * * * John thinks Mary doesn’t know that he loves her because she 4 verbs/12 words . inherited money. John considers Mary unaware of the dependence of his love . for her upon her ... ................
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